Loss of Hope - My Recent Short Film - Feedback? (Link to Film)

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Permalink Reply by Scott Goldberg on November 10, 2008 at 4:39pm

Feedback welcome.

As as artist, can't get better unless I hear some feedback on the film. Pro's...Con's....etc.

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Permalink Reply by Mica on November 10, 2008 at 5:43pm

Wow that was very powerful, beautiful photography.....keep up the good work Scott....;)

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Permalink Reply by Scott Goldberg on November 11, 2008 at 9:01am

Anyone else?

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Permalink Reply by Scott Goldberg on December 24, 2008 at 11:43pm

BUMP!

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Permalink Reply by Scott Goldberg on December 25, 2008 at 2:13am

dtg, elaborate more please. Anyone can make that statement. Write me a detailed response as to why you don't think it "said much". Give me specific points.

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Permalink Reply by AwesomeUniverse!!! on December 25, 2008 at 2:48am

Hi Scott. I think this is excellent. I tried to watch it bout 4 times and it cut off- so maybe people didn't see the whole thing.

I really liked the austere and monochromatic background. The music and scene cuts were great. The only thing that may improve it would be a little more emotion at the beginning. It's like it is all at the end. A little more happiness in the beginning would draw the observer in emotionally. But like I said it may not be what you want at all- you may want the audience to remain detatched until the end.

The other thing is the woman is kind of 2 dimensional. If she were more real you would care that she dies- but it was a little hard to care because I didn't feel like I knew her. Other than coffee- what was she like? Did she like music, or art, or athletics? etc.

The actor has a great voice and is very believable for the most part but at the end it is a little much. I am not sure too much acting?? But maybe just a sillhouette of him hunched over in despair instead of the full on face shot where you can see every grimace..

I liked the vietnam part but I felt like it needed another scene to tie it in- I liked the part about him praying and not sleeping- great details.

I think the end time is a really important topic to cover. I have had dreams about that and war- and atomic bombs etc. What I see is in depth agony, blood, suffering, etc.. It was like your movie is a little clean- but it is hard to do a lot of fake blood and be able to pull it off.

I think that is the problem with conveying environmental and world devastation - the average American is kept from seeing what is really happening. I also think the average person would be more emotional seeing an animal dying than a person- we are just so callous these days..

Keep them coming. We need someone like you putting this out there. =)

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